Report on my Interviews

"Interview, Job, Icon" November 2015 via pixabay.
Public domain dedication

Overall, I'm very pleased with how my interviews went. The people I talked to were very interesting to speak with and I'm actually very glad I had the opportunity with this project to sit down with them and find out about their professional lives.

1. What are the most significant or interesting genres that you learned about from your interviewees? Please identify at least THREE specific genres from your discipline/field of study that your interview subjects discussed writing within.

Three genres I found that my interviewees write in were mainly academic articles, emails are essential for their profession also, one of them also wrote a few books based on marketing. Finding out about these genres was very interesting because I was curious to learn how people in the marketing field write and communicate because I am considering that field in the future.

2. How do these genres differ from one another? Think about things like genre convention, content, purpose, audience, message, and context as you describe these differences.

The genres I listed are very different from each other. Articles are shorter than the books but still have a professional tone. Then emails, on the other hand, are a more casual tone depending on who you are emailing to. Also, one big difference between articles and books is pictures. The books my one interviewee showed me did not have pictures but his articles he showed me were filled with pictures that showed the reader what he was describing.

3. Based on the information you gathered in your interviews, what is challenging and/or difficult about writing within these genres (from a professional's point of view)?

The difficult thing, these professors told me, is keeping it interesting as well as informative. Both professors want to draw the reader in so they actually want to read the article and it will then be cited and recognized more by other professionals in their field. Also the criticism that may be received from different publications would also be difficult.

4. Based on the information you gathered in your interviews, what is exciting and/or rewarding about writing within these genres (from a professional's point of view)?

The exciting part, based on what they told me as well as my own conclusions, is having your work recognized. I think that would be the best part is after all the hard work being put into these different genres, having that pay off by other professionals noticing it and having it become a major piece of work in the marketing field.

5. Where in mass media - popular, academic, and/or social - can examples of this genre be found? If genre examples cannot be found within mass media easily, where can genre examples be found/located?

The way I found these genres is just by googling by interviewees names (Sidney Levy and Michael Harvey) and finding their publications that way. Their publications are all over the internet though because they have been recognized and awarded quite a few times.

From Academia to Social Media

John Hain "Masks, Persona, Duality" July 2015
via pixabay. Public domain dedication 

This blog post is about an author from one of the articles in the Journal of Consumer Research, December 2015 edition. The article this author co-wrote was "On the Psychology of Scarcity: When Reminders of Resource Scarcity Promote Selfish (and Generous) Behavior."

1. What is the name of the author (from the academic journal) that you selected and which social media networks were you able to find her/him on?

The name of the author I selected is Kelly Goldsmith. To be honest, I picked her because she has the same name as me so I'm a little bias. However, getting back on track, I was able to find her on Twitter and LinkedIn.

2. How would you describe the author's social media presence? What kinds of things are they talking about or sharing on social media? Write a brief description of what you learned about them through the listed social media feeds.

I would describe her social media presence as professional. Obviously her LinkedIn is professional because that is a professional site, however her Twitter also has a professional tone because she mainly tweets about research, articles, and things relating to her profession, it seems. I also learned that she is a professor of marketing at Northwestern University (one of the professors I interviewed used to work there as well in the marketing department).

3. Now return to the piece that this author published in the academic journal (from Blog Posts 6.5 & 6.6). How does their persona on social media differ from their persona in the pages of the academic journal?

It is hard to determine how her persona is different between social media and the article because the article was co-written. Therefore it is hard to pick out what part of the writing is hers, rather than the people she wrote it with. However, the article also had a professional tone so I'm going to say that her social media and academic personas are fairly similar.

Rhetorical Analysis of Academic Journal

My Selfie. February 2016

The most recent publication of the Journal of Consumer Research I could find from the University of Arizona library is from December 2015 so I wrote about the publications listed under this publication of the journal.

1. Who are the authors/speakers published in this specific issue of the academic journal you've selected? How many different authors are published here?

The authors listed under the December 2015 publication of this journal are Rom Schrift, Moty Amar, Anne-Kathrin Klesse, Jonathan Levav, Caroline Goukens, Rhiannon MacDonnell, Katherine White, Sunaina Chugani, Julie Irwin, Joseph Redden, Lisa Wan, Robert Wyer, Nicholas Reinholtz, Daniel Bartels, Jeffrey Parker, Caroline Roux, Kelly Goldsmith, Andrea Bonezzi, Luca Cian, Aradhna Krishna, and Norbert Schwarz.

If I counted correctly, I listed 21 authors, which is all of the people listed as authors in the December 2015 edition of the Journal of Consumer Research under the University of Arizona library database.

2. Who is the intended audience for this particular journal issue? How can you tell? Are there any secondary audiences included here? Cite specific details from the journal issue in your answers. 

The intended audience for this journal issue are people interested in consumer behavior. I can tell because of the titles of the articles in this publication of the Journal of Consumer Research. For example, three of the titles are "Positioning Rationality and Emotion: Rationality Is Up and Emotion Is Down," "Consumer Reaction to Attractive Service Providers: Approach or Avoid?" and "The Effect of Preference Expression Modality on Self-Control." As you can see, all three articles are a mix of marketing and psychology, which combines to talk about consumer behavior.

3. What is the context surrounding this particular journal issue? How does this affect the content of the journal?

Like I kind of stated above, the context is consumer research in regards to marketing. This affects the content because only articles relating to psychology, marketing, or consumer behavior will be included in this publication of the journal.

4. What is the overall message of the journal issue? How did you decide this?

I think the overall message would be that there are so many different factors that change how consumer think, feel, and buy. These factors include things such as scarcity, price, etc. Therefore I think the message may be that consumer research is not simple but is a combination of changing factors.

5. What purpose is the journal issue trying to achieve?

The purpose of the journal is to inform readers about the consumer research and the factors that affect it. It is trying to inform people about why scarcity affects people, why emotion and rationality go hand-in-hand and affect consumers behavior, things like that.

My Major

Gemma Villalba "Marketing, Affiliates"
October 2015 via pixabay. Public domain dedicatoin

1. What do students in your program or department learn how to do?

In marketing, students learn how to communicate in the business world and learn how to market ideas, products, etc., to people.

2. What do people who get degrees in this field usually go on to do for work?

People with degrees in marketing can go into a huge variety of fields. Besides marketing, people can go into sales, public relations, advertising, etc. A degree in marketing allows students to go into a huge variety of fields depending on their specific interests.

3. What drew you to this field?

I am a people person that loves to communicate with others. I also love to market things (I've perfected that with my parents) in order to get my way. Just kidding, but sometimes not really. Anyways, back on topic, I've always enjoyed business and I think I am going to stick with marketing throughout my time here at the UA.

4. Name three of the leaders/most exciting people involved in this field right now in 2016. Why are they interesting or exciting to you?

According to this website the top three marketing leaders are Larry Page, the CEO and co-foudner of Google, Tim Cook, the CEO of Apple Revenue, and Mark Zuckerberg, the CEO, chairman, and co-founder of Facebook.

Besides being the top 3 leaders in the marketing world right now, I find these people interesting and exciting because they all run, or take part in running programs/companies that I use on a daily basis. It is very interesting to me how much these people accomplished with a marketing degree, and since I am considering pursuing that, it makes me excited for what I could accomplish in my life.

5. What are the names of three leading academic/scholarly journals in your field? Where are they published?

According to this website the top three marketing journals are Journal of Marketing, Journal of Marketing Research, and Journal of Consumer Research.

All of these journals are published online. With technology becoming more and more prominent in today's world, it makes sense why these journals are published online as well as in print.

My Interviewees on Social Media

Gerd Altman "Tree, Structure, Networks, Internet"
October 2013 via pixabay. Public domain dedication

So, this post I had to tweak a bit to better represent my interviewees. Because while talking to them about social media, I realized that they do not use social media, basically at all. That being said, I did what I could with this topic of the post.

1. What are the names of each interviewee and which social media networks were you able to find each of them on?

Dr. Levy- As stated above, my interviewees rarely/never use social media. However, I was able to find a Facebook page for Dr. Levy. Actually I found two, one saying he works at Northwestern University (his previous job), and one saying he works at University of Arizona. Both with basically the same friends. Therefore, this backs him saying to me that he rarely uses it and doesn't really understand Facebook considering he made two accounts.

Dr. Harvey- Dr. Harvey does not have any social media that I could find, which I expected because he told me that he uses no social media at all.

2. How would you describe each interviewee's social media presence?

Considering they do not use social media I will explain instead what each of my interviewees think about social media/why they do not use it.

Dr. Levy just does not have time for it, he says. He doesn't see a point in it but knows that's what people use, which is the only reason he has a Facebook so he can keep in touch with his family.

Dr. Harvey is definitely opposed to social media. I came to this conclusion after talking my interview with him and hearing his responses to my questions. He thinks that social media is a waste of time, pointless, and makes people 2-dimensional. He believes that there is nothing valuable to come out of social media, which I personally disagree with, but hey, to each their own.

3. Now return to the piece that this author published in the academic journal (from Blog Posts 6.2). How does their persona on social media differ from their persona in the pages of the academic journal?

Because they do not have a social media presence, I cannot make a comparison to different types of personas they may have. So basically that's all I have for this question.

My Interviewees as Professional Writers

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Having already completed my interviews before the end of deadline 6 was very beneficial because I have a deeper insight into these professor's writings through taking to them rather than just research.

1. Give us the name of each interviewee and write a short summary of the kinds of professional publications they've authored.

Dr. Levy has written a huge variety of professional publications. While talking to him, he even showed me many of the writings he has published, including original drafts of some articles, which was very cool to see. Dr. Levy has written books, articles, poetry pertaining to marketing, and a one act play.

Dr. Harvey mainly writes articles in his professional world. The articles are about marketing, because that is the field he works in. Some of his articles he has published have been cited over 7,000 times, while other articles by professionals only are cited 20 times.

2. What professional genres has each interviewee written in? Explain how these genres differ from each other, according to conventions, formatting, techniques, content, and anything else that seems relevant to describe.

Dr. Levy- Leaning about Dr. Levy's writing was extremely interesting because he showed me many examples of hard copies of his writing that he had in his office. Being able to actually see his writing while he was talking about it was a very cool experience. One publication he showed me was his article "Stalking the Amphisbaena," published in December of 1996. The second one he showed me is called "Symbols for Sale."

The two genres of these articles are similar, but not the same. The Amphisbaena article is about marketing and psychology while also integrating an ancient myth as a metaphor into the piece. It also incorporates humor and personality into it. The second article also has personality integrated into it but it definitely has more of a professional, informational tone to it.

Dr. Harvey-  Unlike my interview with Dr. Levy, Dr. Harvey did not show me specific examples of his articles however he did explain to me that he writes solely about marketing and some of his articles have been cited from other professionals over 7,000 times.

The first article I found of his is called "Monitoring Reverse Logistics Programs: A Roadmap to Sustainable Development in Emerging Markets." The second article I found is entitled "The Occurrence of Bullying in Global Organizations: A Model and Issues Associated With Social/Emotional Contagion."  Similar to the articles by Dr. Levy, the first article listed also involved psychology and the second was just about marketing.

3. What is the context surrounding the two different pieces published by each of your interviewees? 

Dr. Levy- The first article I mentioned that was written by Dr. Levy was written for the Journal of Consumer Research for their 25th anniversary. The second article was written for the Harvard Business Review.

Dr. Harvey- The first article about monitoring reverse logistics programs was written for the Multinational Business Review. The second article involving psychology was for the Journal of Applied Social Psychology.

4. What is the overall message of each piece? How did you decide this? 

Dr. Levy- The message of these pieces was to be informative while also adding humor and personality into these pieces to make them interesting. I decided this because while I was talking to Dr. Levy he explained that he enjoys being humorous in his writing and creating titles and using words that interest the reader and draws them into his articles, books, etc.

Dr. Harvey- The message of these articles by Dr. Harvey and his associates is about marketing and psychology as well. The message for these is how marketing can be used in all aspects of life and how it pertains to different aspects of businesses and economics.

5. What purpose is each piece trying to achieve? Cite specific details from the pieces in your answers. 

Dr. Levy- The purpose for the first article was to connect psychology and marketing to the ancient myth of the Amphisbaena. The second article was about how the "language of symbols" integrates into the marketing world.

Dr. Harvey- The message of the first article is how institutional theory can be used to show positive and negative impacts on environment sustainability and how this can be predicted.

My Interview Subjects

I feel so ahead of the game because I've already done my two interviews. This makes me feel more prepared and less stressed for Project 2 (so far) so I am ready to get the ball rolling on this and get working.

1. The names of the two people you're scheduled to interview for Project 2.

The first person I interviewed was Dr. Sidney Levy.

The second person I interviewed was Michael Harvey.

2. The names of the organization(s) your interviewees work for, as well as their job titles.

Dr. Levy works in the Eller College of Management here at the U of A mainly as a researcher and stand in professor for a few classes each semester. However, he no longer teaches semester long classes.

Dr. Harvey is a senior lecturer also in the Eller College of Management.

3. Any higher education degree that your interviewees hold and the names of the institutions that issued them.

Dr. Levy's highest level of education was a PH.D from the University of Chicago.

Dr. Harvey also has a PH.D. but from the University of Arizona.

4. How many years your interviewees have worked in the field professionally.

Dr. Levy has worked in the marketing field for over 40 years now, as a professor, researcher, author, and more.

Dr. Harvey has worked in the marketing field for over 20 years.

5. If you can, provide photos or images of the two interviewees (identify them with captions), as well as hyperlinks to their professional website(s) or home page(s).

Dr. Levy. Picture from Eller website.
Main Eller page here.

Dr. Harvey. Picture from Eller website.
Main Eller page here.

6. The date, time & location of your scheduled interview.

I interviewed Dr. Levy at 1pm on Monday February 22, 2016 in his office in the McClelland Hall marketing department, room 320G.

I interviewed Dr. Harvey also on Monday February 22, 2016 at McClelland Hall at 3pm in his office.

7. A list of 8 to 12 interview questions (for each interviewee) that are written specifically to reflect the interviewee's background, position and publication history.

Here are the 10 same questions I asked both interviewees. After these 10, there are two listed by each interviewees name that I asked them specifically to reflect them.

1. How would you describe your role/position here at Eller?

2. What are the most common writing genres that you write in on a daily basis?

3. What kind of role does social media play in your job?

4. How has your writing process changed over your career?

5. What do you think the most important step of your writing process is?

6. Is there anything about professional communication that students or young people getting into this field should know?

7. Where do you like to write?

8. What is your favorite genre to write in?

9. Do you prefer to type or hand write your work?

10. Would you mind me emailing you a few follow up questions in the next week if I were to have some?

Dr. Levy:

1. I noticed that you are titled as a "Coca Cola distinguished professor," what does that mean?

2. I noticed that you've written a number of books, articles, poetry, etc., could you tell me about some of those?

Mr. Harvey-

1. You said you prefer to hand write your work, how does that help your writing process?

2. Tell me more about the external audiences you communicate in Australia and Croatia, what is that like?

Brutally Honest Self-Assessment

"Stress, Word-Art, Depression" October 2015 via pixabay. Public domain dedication

At last project 1 is finished. After a long few weeks of working on this QRG, I can finally say I'm done. This project was definitely something new for me, writing a QRG and blogging for all my peers to see, but I feel as though the blogs especially were beneficial for my writing because it helped me add more personality into my blog posts instead of straight facts.

The two pictures I added represent me at the beginning/middle of this project and at the end. The stress is obviously how I felt during while I was getting everything done. The second picture represents this blog post. The last puzzle piece to this entire project. With this now posted, the entire picture of project 1 has been put together.

1. How are you feeling about the project you just submitted for assessment? Give me your raw, unvarnished opinion of your own project overall.

Honestly, I think I did well on this project. I worked extremely hard on it this entire week because I obviously wanted to do well. And I think I did. For my first time writing a QRG, I'm proud of what I have accomplished. Going into the second project I will definitely be more prepared for the work load and will have a better handle on getting things done more efficiently.

2. What are the major weaknesses of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be weak or under-developed.

One weakness is the design of my QRG, I think I did alright with that, but it isn't perfect. It was definitely harder than I thought to add more color, art, etc., to make it interesting. But I'm hoping what I did is enough because I still do think it looks clean and professional. One other weakness would be my lack of quotes, I wish I would have added in a few more quotes from stakeholders at the rally. However I did add two and I explained the main stakeholder in a lot of detail so I think that will hopefully make up for that.

3. What are the major strengths of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be strong or well-developed.

A strength I am very confident in is the information I provided in my QRG. I think I was very detailed in explaining the controversy, the pros and cons of the controversy and the stakeholders while still being unbiased. Also, I feel as though I was able to place my information in a logical way that makes sense while you read it. It isn't all over the place, it flows nicely and is easy to follow along like a story in a sense.

4. What do you think of how you practiced time management for Project 1? Did you put enough time and effort into the project? Did you procrastinate and wait till the last minute to work on things? Share any major time management triumphs or fails.... 

I will admit, I did put some things off during this project, but that does not mean any less effort went into it. Every task in this project, from the planning, to the blog posts, to the project draft and final itself, I put 100% of my effort into in order to do the best job I could. One thing with time management though was I noticed myself focusing more on the blog posts and getting those done and doing well on them rather than the actual project. Thankfully I noticed that before it was too late and I ran out of time so I was still able to spend a lot of time on my QRG and work on it until I was happy with the result.

Willi Heidelbach "Puzzle, Match, Fit, Missing, Hole"
August 2009 via pixabay. Public domain dedication

Local Revision: Variety

Gerd Altman "Question Mark, Note, Man, Person" September 2014
via pixabay. Public domain dedication

Looking through the sentence variety was actually quite helpful because it helped me see where I need to change things up and where I am consistent and should keep things that way. The hardest part about this, though, will be trying to change things up in my writing in terms of sentence structure and vocabulary (hence the photo).

1. How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing?

Looking through my current draft, I noticed a majority of my sentences are either simple or compound. However, I do have a few complex sentences, but no compound-complex that I could find.

2. What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)?

My paragraphs flow well together, it is clear to see what I am talking about at the beginning of each paragraph and they all go in a chronological order. What I did notice though is that I tend to start sentences the same way, so that is definitely something I need to fix before I submit the final project.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?

My vocabulary could be improved in places, but I do use a variety of different words to express things throughout my project. The main weakness of my project is how I repeat some words (protest, for example, I used quite a few times). So I need to go back and fix some of those. The main strength of my vocabulary is that (when I am not repeating myself) I do use different and more exciting words to describe events and people.

Pronoun Usage

"Pencil, Happy, Jumping, School" October 2013
via pixabay. Public domain dedication

After examining every pronoun in my project I learned something about my writing style and how specific I am when it comes to writing about people and places. Also, I added this picture of a pencil because it made me laugh. Why? I don't know. But I included it anyway. The end.

1. Based on your analysis, how effective is your pronoun usage in Project 1? What does actively examining your pronoun usage tell you about your writing style?

I feel as though my pronoun usage is effective and not overbearing. I did not have too large of a number of pronouns throughout my draft, meaning that I was more specific when describing people, places, etc., by saying exactly what they are.

2. Are there any instances in your project where you speak to or refer directly to the audience? If not, why not?

In my project, I did not directly refer to the audience. In my personal writing style, I tend to not use "you" a lot unless it is relevant. This is because I do not feel it necessary to use "you" in many writing situations. For this project specifically, I am simply informing people about the issue I chose to talk about. Because I am giving facts in an interesting way (I hope) I did not find any place to use "you" that would have fit well into my project.

My Pronouns

Here is a list of the pronouns I used throughout the first draft of my project!

these (minimum wage protestors)

their (Fighting for $15)

they (SEIU)

this (minimum wage protests)

this (minimum wage protests)

they (minimum wage protestors)

they (minimum wage workers)

Gerd Altman "I, You, He" April 2013 via pixabay.
Public domain dedication

they (minimum wage protestors)

they (minimum wage protestors)

their (minimum wage protestors)

their (minimum wage protestors)

those (candidates that agree with protestors)

this (Los Angeles protest)

he (Frank Trejo)

her (Fannie Velasquez)

her (Fannie Velasquez)

her (Fannie Velasquez)

their (minimum wage protestors)

this (minimum wage protest)

they (people working with minimum wage salary)

they (businesses affected by minimum wage)

these (minimum wage workers on social programs)

their (minimum wage workers)

it (minimum wage)

they (businesses affected by minimum wage)

they (businesses affected by minimum wage)

they (businesses affected by minimum wage)

This task was the most difficult for me because it was very time consuming and to be honest, I'm not that great with active and passive verbs. So, I did the best I could. Below is an accurate representation of me completing this blog post.

"Achievement, Across, Advantage" April 2015 via pixabay. Public domain dedication

Active (General)                                                  Active (Specific)                                               Passive

took                                                                          marching                                                             see
equipped                                                                    painted                                                            is (6)
ranging                                                                  protesting (4)                                                   was (5)
raise (2)                                                                      appear                                                          can (2)
become                                                                    supporting                                                    were (3)
taking                                                                        gathered                                                             had
make                                                                        raising (4)                                                       get (2)
stating                                                                    obtained (3)                                                          uses
give                                                                           reached                                                         will (3)
want                                                                         protest (2)                                                        be (2)
wanted                                                                       gain (2)                                                             may
support (3)                                                                  attend                                                              need 
continuing                                                                 tweeted
agree                                                                          putting
covering                                                                    running
interviewed                                                            intensifying
pay
stated
plays
show
taken
adapted
meaning
given
have
spend
spending
earning
hire
keep (4)
increasing
reduced
relying
rely (2)
decreased
making
raised
happens
risen
taken
adapted
brings
being
afford
pay
compensate
hurt
result
afford
hire
increased
attempt
obtain
hurting
looking

1. Looking at the breakdown of your verb choices here, what do you notice about your current draft? 

What I notice is that most of my verbs are active general. The verbs I use the most after active general is active specific, and I used passive the least.

2. Based on this analysis, how could your use of verbs be improved overall in the project?

I definitely could use more active specific verbs in my project because I feel as though it would make my project stronger by describing more specifically what the stakeholders, and people involved in the controversy, are doing.

Local Revision: Tense Usage

"Checklist, List, Check" September 2015 via pixabay. Pubic domain dedication

Hopefully I got all of the verbs and put them in the correct column (after staring at a long list of words for a while mistakes happen, but I think I got it). Anyways, here is my verb list separated into past, present and future tenses.

Past                                                                       Present                                                               Future

took                                                                     marching                                                            will (3)
painted                                                                equipped
was (5)                                                                    see
were (3)                                                                 is (6)  
gathered                                                           protesting (4)
had                                                                       ranging
obtained (3)                                                         raise (2)
increased                                                              can (2)
adapted (2)                                                           taking
wanted                                                                  make
reached                                                                appear
interviewed                                                         become
stated                                                                 supporting
tweeted                                                              raising (4)
reduced                                                                 stating
decreased                                                               give
raised                                                                     want
                                                                            protest (2)
                                                                             gain (2)
                                                                           support (3)
                                                                           continuing
                                                                               agree
                                                                              get (2)
                                                                            covering
                                                                               uses
                                                                              pay (2)
                                                                               plays
                                                                              attend
                                                                               show
                                                                             taken (2)
                                                                            meaning
                                                                              given
                                                                              have
                                                                              spend
                                                                            putting
                                                                           spending
                                                                             be (2)
                                                                            earning
                                                                            hire (2)
                                                                            keep (4)
                                                                          increasing
                                                                            relying
                                                                            rely (2)
                                                                              may
                                                                             need
                                                                           running
                                                                           making
                                                                           happens
                                                                             risen
                                                                           brings
                                                                            being
                                                                         afford (2)
                                                                       compensate
                                                                            hurt
                                                                           result
                                                                     intensifying
                                                                         attempt
                                                                          obtain
                                                                          hurting
                                                                         looking

1. Which tense is the most prevalent in your draft?

As you can see from this list, I definitely used present tense the most in this draft.

2. What effect or tone/quality does the current usage of tense have on the reader/viewer/listener?

I think that using present tense in my draft shows the reader that this controversy was recent and that the issues are still prevalent and the issue is still going on. Therefore, I personally do not think that it would make sense to write about the issue in past tense.

3. If you're using more than one tense in the draft (which is not a bad thing at all), do the shifts between different tenses in the piece make sense?

A lot of the past tense I used was to talk about what people said or what happened before the controversy so I feel as though it flows nicely together.

4. If you have not employed any present tense verbs in your piece - why not?

I did use present tense in my draft so n/a.

My Verbs

Here is the list of verbs from my first draft!

took
marching

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equipped
painted
see
is
protesting
was
was
ranging
protesting
raise
can
become
were
is
taking
make
appear
supporting
protesting
gathered
had
raising
stating
give
want
obtained
wanted
protesting
reached
is
protest
gain
support
obtained
continuing
rallies
strikes
is
gain
support
agree
get
protest
were
covering
were
obtained
interviewed
was
is
uses
pay
stated
plays
attend
can
show
support
was
tweeted
raising
was
taken
adapted
meaning
given
have
spend
putting
spending
will
be
earning
will
hire
keep
increasing
reduced
relying
rely
is
may
need
rely
be
keep
running
decreased
making
keep
raised
happens
keep
risen
raising
taken
adapted
raising
brings
being
afford
pay
raise
compensate
hurt
result
afford
will
hire
intensifying
increased
attempt
obtain
hurting
looking
get

Verb tally:

was/were/- 8, raise/raising- 8, is- 6, protesting/protest- 6, supporting/support- 4, keep- 4, took/taken/taking- 4, obtained- 3, will- 3, be/being- 3, relying/rely- 3, can- 2, make- 2, see/show- 2, had/have- 2 , stating/stated- 2, give/given- 2, want/wanted- 2, gain- 2
get- 2, pay- 2, adapted- 2, spend/spending- 2, afford- 2, hurt/hurting- 2, increasing- 2, hire- 2

Local Revision: Wordiness

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Looking through my QRG, I noticed most of my paragraphs are fairly short (which I believe is a good thing), but the one posted below was definitely one of the noticeably longest.

Longest paragraph from my QRG:

"The thousands that gathered in the streets in Downtown L.A. for this protest all had the same goal. To raise the minimum wage. But a legislation has already been passed in Los Angeles regarding the minimum wage. An article in KTLA states that the legislation says 'minimum wage workers in California will see a bump in hourly pay in 2016, as the rate increases by a dollar to $10 beginning Jan. 1.'"

Same paragraph after revising and shortening:

The thousands that gathered in the streets in Downtown L.A. all had the same goal of raising the minimum wage. However a legislation, stating that 'minimum wage workers in California will see a bump in hourly pay in 2016, as the rate increases by a dollar to $10 beginning Jan. 1.'" Found in this KTLA article.

How is the rewritten section different from the original, from the perspective of your audience? Is it better? In what way? Is it worse? In what way?

The rewritten section is different from the original because it is not only shorter but worded slightly differently. In my perspective I think that this section is easier to read now after being reworded and therefore is better to include in my project than the original.

Peer Review #2

I peer reviewed Chandler Gillette's college essay as well as Erin McCabes QRG. You can find the rubric for Chandler here and for Erin here.

Questions:

1. What did you learn about your own project by comparing drafts of the same project in different genres?

Something I learned by looking at both a QRG and a standard college essay is that I think I need to add more of my own personality into my draft, I think I just stated facts too often, but I will have to go back and see.

2. Top three issues or problems with your draft?

One issue is definitely formatting, I still need to go add more color to make it more appealing to the eye at first site.

The second issue is content. I need to add more about my stakeholders that were part of/at the event into my draft rather than just the event specifically.

The last thing is organization. I feel as though I need to rearrange where I put what facts/ideas so it flows better together and is easier to read.

3. Top three strengths of your draft?

One strength is my content. Besides the stakeholders, I feel as though I have a lot of very strong factual and interesting information.

Another strength is I feel as though I represented both sides of my controversy as well with some of my subheadings within my QRG.

The final strength is my pictures. I found some great pictures that relate to my controversy that easily illustrate what I am trying to talk about.

Now that I have learned more about my QRG and received some feedback from my peers it's time to get to revising. Hence the picture below.

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